I like to read a lot about music and entertainment so for the purpose of this course I would like to focus on those areas. There are no shortages of those kinds of blogs but I think that I can bring a unique perspective by discussing themes and artists that are not necessarily main stream. I find that when it comes to entertainment blogging, people tend to just jump on bandwagons of what everyone else is talking about. If I read three blogs in one day they are all usually writing about the same stuff and begging readers to remember that they “heard it here first.” A lot of times I find myself wishing that they had given more meat in their article that just simply stating that something occurred.
I would like my blog to look more like the comment sections of many on these blogs with interesting opinions and perspectives that people can build off of when commenting. I won’t just talk about what an outrages occurrence on a reality show. I plan to g a step further and actually give an opinion about it. Also, I look forward to the opportunity to talk about topics and people that other people are not writing about in the entertainment world.
There is a lot of interesting interpretations of movies and music on the internet that range from secret society claims to other claims of corrupt messages for the masses and I would like to discuss some of these as well. Thinking critically about the things we watch and listen to is a right that many people forfeit so I would like to get a dialog going about how some may be affected. For instance, The Bad Girls Club is a show all about women living in a house and acting more like they live in an insane asylum. They have achieved record rating during their most recent seasons and I can’t help but wonder if they are affecting the behavior of young girls who sadly don’t have the guidance at home that would prevent them from watching in the first place. Don’t get me started on MTV’s new show Skins!!
What I hope this blog will be is “Talk Soup” for the thinker. I hope to offer a fresh perspective and interesting point of view on this topic.
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ReplyDeleteYou have a great topic here, and a great opportunity to make your voice heard about the others (TMZ.com, Perez Hilton) who either write garbage or fail to offer any unique insight on the entertainment world. This post in itself serves as your argument, and after reading it, I feel convinced that the Internet needs your voice in the mix.
I like your example of “The Bad Girls Club” because it demonstrates how television is much like the Internet. So much material doesn’t seem worth our time, and yet the stuff that catches peoples’ attention often comes as a surprise.
Since you have a clear direction, I’m going to nitpick a bit on how you can clean up some of your mechanics and therefore strengthen your point of view. You frequently slip into passive voice, which weakens your delivery. Look at this sentence, for example:
“Thinking critically about the things we watch and listen to is a right that many people forfeit so I would like to get a dialog going about how some may be affected.”
The power verbs here are “forfeit” (great verb) and “affect.” So you might rewrite like this;’
Many people forfeit the right to think critically about entertainment. How does it affect them?
See how much verbal clutter you can eliminate by writing in active rather than passive voice? Passive voice has its place and purpose, but for this course you should try to rid your posts of as many “to be” verbs as possible. I encourage you to rewrite this post (at some point) with that in mind. The newfound clarity in your argument will surprise you!
I look forward to the kinds of specific forms of entertainment you will address. I think your idea will serve as a great mix of fun and insight.
--Prof. Nichols
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ReplyDeleteI am not sure what happened to my comment, but I can't remember what I wrote before. My only critique on this post would be to change your first sentence. Instead of just introducing your topic right away, try to reel the readers in with an attention-grabbing sentence to start it off!
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